Our story starts with a timid girl named Indie. She is an
only child of a family that is anything but inviting. She grew up with a lack
of an ability to converse which meant she had a very small amount of friends.
It’s not her fault, she was just so shy she never knew what to say. Indie’s
special power did not help the situation much either.
Indie's thought on friendship
Indie does have one best friend. That friends name is Sammy.
She is the better half of her.
Sammy is very social and kind towards everyone. She knows
exactly what Indie is thinking at all times. Without Sammy, Indie is ten times
more likely to have social anxiety… especially when dealing with the popular
group at school.
This group consists of 4 girls that call themselves The
Talk. They are all pretty even in popularity, with the exception of Julia.
Julia is the head of the group and therefore the head of the school. She has
platinum blonde hair with bubble gum pink lips on a daily basis. Julia and
Indie have never truly gotten along. They have grown up through grade school
together, but they were never able to understand one another. This was
especially true on the last week of school before Winter Break.
Indie, Sammy, Julia and the remaining members of The Talk
were all in the same algebra class. It was time for finals and Indie was
apprehensive about using her powers. Her powers consist of the ability to see
exactly where a person is in a certain point in time and also to alter a vision
to provide false information. If Indie were to use her powers, she could see
the final exam and the correct answers from the professor. Indie refuses to
cheat her way through her education. Unfortunately, this is not the same morals
everyone in her class has.
Julia swiftly walked up to Indie and asks for the answers
without any hesitation. In the past Indie has been the victim of Julia’s cruel
needs of wanting to see what the future holds. Sammy would be there to support
Indie in the right direction, but Indie would never follow as Julia was
extremely convincing.
“I really need those answers Indie. I have a couple parties
coming up so if I could have them then I would not have to worry about
studying” said Julia. “And if you don’t give me the answers, then I will make
your social life more miserable then it already is.”
Indie quickly accepted the request and said “okay, I will
have them for you tomorrow”.
Indie knew that she needed to talk to Sammy.
After catching Sammy up on the situation, she had a lot of
advice.
“You are better than this Indie. It is immoral and not to
mention the highest form of academic misconduct. Why should she benefit from
your powers? You have been so good about always doing what is right, why should
Julia change that? So what if she ‘ruins your social life’! Anyone that knows
you knows that you are a great person and that is all that matters.”
Indie had a lot to think about. She knew what the right
thing to do was, but she was afraid of the possible backlash.
It was the next day and algebra had just begun. Julia
strutted up to Indie and asked for a sheet with the answers. Indie reluctantly
hands her a paper with the questions and the answers to those questions. Julia
did not even thank her but rather sat back at her desk and shared the answers
with The Talk. Little do they know what Indie had truly done.
Fast forward to the next day. The final algebra exam had
concluded and the teacher was handing back grades. Julia and The Talk were dumb
founded when they saw a big fat 0 in red ink. Julia stood up and said
“Indie! You are OVER!”
And with that said, Indie promptly arose and said “I’m not,
but you are”. She was finally able to stand up for herself. Julia and The Talk
were all sent to the principal’s office for a talk about having to repeat
algebra and about the suspicion of all the ladies getting the same grade.
Indie approached Sammy and said
“I really thought about everything that you said. I am
better than Julia and I think I showed that. I did give her a sheet of answers.
That is what she asked for. She never said that they had to be correct.”
Authors note: This story was fun to write! I took the
characters Sampati and Indrajit from the Ramayana and incorporated them into
the story. These characters were both able to see certain situations through
visions. The character named Indie is a short form of Indrajit. Indie is a good
character for most of the story, but when she alters her vision to give Julia
the wrong answer is when she shows signs of Indrajit. In the Ramayana, Indrajit
showed Rama that Sita is dead when she actually isn’t. The character Sammy is
short for Sampati. Sammy was just a good character in the story that wanted the
best for her friend.
Hi Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI like the ending of your story. If I had been Indie, I too would have provided the girls with the wrong answers, so it was good to see that she stood up for herself. When she said she would have the answers the next day I was a bit worried that she had backed down and not taken her friend's advice by believing in her own goodness.
I think it would be helpful if the story was completely written in past or present tense, instead of the interchanging throughout, but the sections of your story were well-decided.
I was hoping the whole time that Indie would give her the wrong answers. I was shocked when that’s how the story turned out. You're description of the characters was spot on and really put an image of the scenario in my head. I really liked the role of Sammy in the story; she seemed almost too perfect with her good advice and social skills. I was wondering if this story was meant to be similar to Mean Girls? "The Talk" reminded me a lot of those girls in that movie. Also, was there a reason that Sammy was a friend with Indie and the Talk? It would have been really cool if the other characters, besides Sammy, did not know about Indie's powers. I wish I could read more about the situations Indie would get into with her power. Also, if she found out other kids in her school had the same powers as her.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. The plot was very interesting. Indie giving her the wrong answers in the end was a perfect way to end this story. I really enjoyed seeing Indie grow as a person and realize she is better than succumbing to peer pressure of her fellow students. I like the aspect of seeing someone realize that they are better than what they make themselves out to be. Good read!
Hannah, you did a great job of incorporating the characters from the Ramayana. You truly made the story your own. The underlying background and qualities of the the characters Indrajit and Sampati was there, but it didn't exactly follow the original story directly, which makes it unique. I really like the image you chose. The words are powerful, because often people judge the quality of their living and support by the number of people that surround them; however, that is not always the case.
ReplyDeleteHannah, I did not read that version of the Ramayana so the author's note was very helpful! It would have been interesting to know if other people had powers too or if India is just an extra special girl at a totally normal school. I liked how you ended the story with "The Talk" all getting in trouble. They deserve it. (Mean Girls maybe?)
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